Could I possibly get some feedback on my first mystery?

Could I possibly get some feedback on my first mystery?

Could I possibly get some feedback on my first mystery? It’s set in 1959, and the characters are roadtripping across america o Route 66 and this is the first stop.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1gx7zUpesrYM4_FZ_0cIJLEOLcjBtycBm/view?usp=drive_web