I’ve also been working on the intro comic and would love to hear peoples’ thoughts on it. I used a larger font than will be used in the comic (about 20% bigger than normal comics) and there’s still a bunch of text, so I’m going to try to trim it down some more. The layout is mine and just for visualizing how much text there is – Jonathan will obviously do a far better job (particularly with page 2 imagine!).
The concept is to have it come after the list of terms, and to have some reference sheets in front of you when reading (if you want to create a character along with it) but mostly just for getting an idea of the system and how it plays so I’m more interested in that feedback – do you think it’ll be fun and useful – especially to someone just sitting down to grok the system and wants a comfortable read in a format they know and love.
alternate link: https://app.box.com/s/hvcpiya3apwmke8ys2xg
https://www.dropbox.com/sh/wm2kxz1ks3cbihq/AAB-fkSlzi1fVcE1afXdRV66a
The spacing is really tight! Almost feels a few more pages would help.
Yeah, the font size is partly to blame, but I’ve definitely got a lot of trimming down to do, at the very least. What do you think of the concept and the dialogue though? Do you think it’d be helpful for a newbie sitting to grok the system?
I am going to print out and read this weekend …….. sorry, with it so tight was hard to read om screen
The pics were really just for me to visualize the text and think about paneling – there’s a word document in the folder that should be way easier to read, I’m guessing!
There are a few typos (in the layout version), etc., but I think it gives a good overview of the basics of the game. It made me want to whip up a character and join in the fun. Well done.
One question: near the end of the comic, you mention Saudade by name, but until that point she’s a mysterious baddie. I’m assuming Cerberus knows her (since he’s famous in town), and that’s why her name is used. Is that correct?
Can’t wait to get my hands on the finished book!
Yeah, I used her name just to imply that the characters know her. Glad you liked it!
I put up a redone version in case anyone missed it with way less text and that’s a bit different conceptually as well. Check it out: https://plus.google.com/116437358395352203373/posts/eaiVAK1K4Vh