Hi everyone, I need some feedback on a couple of custom moves I have created for special items in my game.
The relic of the fairy is a silver sphere that contains a truth serum:
Whenever you try to make someone drink the serum roll with heart on a success you can ask any question an it must be answered truthfully. On a 7-9 choose one:
The person notices that something is off, – 1 to rolls against they for the rest of the session.
You run out if potion and can’t use it for the rest of the session.
On a failure the character notices your intentions lie and mark corruption or own them one for the trouble you created.
The other is a DIY flamethrower by some character that doesn’t have any move related to item construction. So we established that it is unstable and dangerous:
When using the flamethrower in a fight roll with mind on a success choose one:
You do 2 fire damage in an area in front of you
The enemies in the area fear the fire and you get an opportunity.
On a 7-9 choose one:
Something goes wrong and you burn your hands: take 1 penetrating fire damage
The fuel runs out.
If you fail something goes horribly wrong, the MC will decide what happens.
Second one seems ok.
I have problem with trigger for first one. I would separate somehow creation of opportunity for someone to drink a truth serum (although simple Misdirect is what you probably want) and the actual success of truth serum.
Sometimes NPCs would not oppose drinking truth serum like when you use it on a friend who didn’t expected you of such treachery, sometimes it might be borderline impossible to do it, like when you are summoned for quick meeting with angry Vamp Lord.
I would change “The person notices that something is off, – 1 to rolls against they for the rest of the session.” into “They know what you did and demand a debt”
Regarding a miss I’d either leave it open for MC to decide or I would reverse the power, since I imagine potion is highly magical and magic can backfire, the victim can ask user one question which he might answer truthfully 🙂
Pawel Solowczuk thanks for the feedback. I will try to rework the first one then.
I have been thinking about the first move and I don’t know if it’s better to roll with heart or with wild since it’s an item from the fairy realm.