3 thoughts on “I realize it is complicated and detailed. Please let me know if it is too much or hard to follow.”

  1. Looks pretty good to me.

    I notice the countdown isn’t set up quite right – you have some of the mystery background in there. The “day” item should be the first thing that happens after the hunters get involved rather than the background to the mystery.

    The other thing is that you have set it up with a specific finale in mind. That’s not bad in itself, but you need to prepare for what happens if the hunters avoid that trap, or else take a shortcut that prevents it ever happening. Alternatively, start the mystery with the hunters in the gala and have everything happen once the doors get locked (you can still include the other material via flashbacks, like the way many Supernatural episodes have a teaser with Sam & Dean in big trouble and then cut to “24 hours earlier…”)

  2. Michael Sands I made edits based on your suggestions. I see it has improved things already. THANK YOU! I cannot tell you how awesome it is to have the game creator so involved in the community and so willing to give your time and advice so freely. Thank you again.

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